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@ 2004-08-06 08:24:00
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Lullaby by Citrine
Smeagol comes home to his Granny after a day on the river...


Title: Lullaby
Author: Citrine
Characters: Smeagol and his Granny
Rating: PG-13 for general creepyness
Summary: Pre-quest, drama, kind of a gapfiller. Smeagol comes home to his Granny after a day on the river.
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Well, I don't have it, Smeagol thought. That's what I'll tell Granny, if she asks me.

Ah, said the other voice. But she won't ask us for it, she can't ask us if she doesn't know. Calm and careful we must be.

Smeagol could feel his pulse fluttering in his throat. His left hand was clenched in a fist at his side, his shirt and breeches were damp and daubed with clay, and water dripped from the hair that veiled his eyes. Granny was sitting by her hearth on a low stool in front of him, but he dare not look at her. Granny was so very old that her hair had turned white as goose down, her back was bent, and her brown face was as seamed as an old apple. But her black eyes were still sharp, oh ever so sharp, and if she looked in his face she might see inside of him. She might see the Bad Thing he didn't want to think about ever again, and the lovely, bright, cruel flicker of gold.

Granny looked up, blinking in the dim light. "Ah, there you are! Come here to the fire, lad, yer soaked." She held out her arms and he came to her and sat at her feet, leaning his head on her knees. Her gnarled old hand stroked his head, never minding that he was getting her skirts all wet. "Now, pet, what you been doin, eh?"

"Fishin," Smeagol said. His throat ached horribly, as if he had swallowed a stone, and his breath felt short.

Lullay, lullay, bye, Granny sang softly.
Lullay bye babe, thy cradle is green,
Father is noble, mother a queen
And sister a fine lady with a gold ring,
And brother an archer, at the side of the King…


Smeagol had no mother, father, sister, or brother, and the King was a Man sitting on a tall throne in a white city far, far away, the tales all said. In all the world he had only Granny and Deagol, and now Deagol was...

"And where is yer cousin now, my love?" Granny murmured, as if she had plucked the thought from his head. "Still a-fishin'?"

Smeagol shivered. He felt miserable and cold, and sick deep down inside, but he had fallen nearly into a doze as he was soothed by Granny's hand. O careful, careful now, precious. "Deagol's sleepin," he whispered.

"Sleepin?" Granny laughed quietly. "Reckon he won't be catchin many fish that way!"

Smeagol laughed, too. He had heard a sweet, clear song in his head, louder and louder, until he couldn't hear Deagol crying. He could never bear the sound of Deagol crying. He loved his cousin better than anyone else in the world. Shh, shh, he had said, and squeezed and pressed, until everything was quiet and Deagol had gone to sleep. No, no more fishes for Deagol. "Sleepin under the willows, he is, safe and quiet."

"Under the willows! What a daft lad is our Deagol then, to lay hisself down in the muck and the damp. He'll catch his death. Why didn't he come home, if he was that tired?"

"Don't know," Smeagol said, and pretended to yawn. He brought his hand up to his breast and held it there against his heart. The ring burned inside his closed fist like a hot coal. His Precious now, his own, although Deagol had found it, it was his by right, yes, because it was his birthday present. Cruel Deagol hadn’t played fair; he had meant to keep it for himself. "Don't care, neither."

His last words had come out a bit sharp, and he felt Granny's hand go still. All his guts gave a sudden, sickly lurch and seemed to drop like a bucket down a well. Then she sighed and he could relax and breathe again.

"Lads and their quarrels," Granny grumbled. What had it been about this time, she wondered. No doubt it was over something foolish and petty: A handful of berries, the loss of some silly lad's game, or perhaps a bright river-stone. Smeagol had a magpie's lust for shiny things, and praps Deagol had won out, for once. More than a little too fond of having his own way, was her Smeagol-lad. Ah well, when Deagol had got done gloating over whatever prize he had won, he would come home, and they would patch it up, as they always did. Granny began to hum again, petting the damp curls off Smeagol's brow.

Smeagol let Granny's song seep into him, and he rubbed his cheek against the coarse cloth of her gown. He willed himself to think of eggses, the river, nothing at all, not of empty eyes, and cold arms that would never reach out to him again. The day had been so warm, the sun so bright, but not so warm and bright as the little gold band Deagol had struggled so to keep. Now he was hidden away in the dark with a flat stone over each eye as he slept. Smeagol would go visit him the next day, and for many days to come until the ring stripped him of everything he was and love, and guilt, and memory were out of reach. Every day he would cry a bit because he was sorry, and he would laugh a bit because the beautiful Precious was his, all his forever. He would make Deagol a blanket of green rushes, and for the rest of summer he would bring him bundles of iris blue as the sky, and lilies as golden as the sun, and fill his cold hands with blossoms, and in the dark the reek of corruption would mingle with the sweet breath of dying flowers.



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[info]voontah
2004-08-06 07:08 pm UTC (link)
Ooh, excellent. I had always hoped someone would write a story about Smeagol and Deagol. I always imagined that they had been dear friends (perhaps as dear as other, more familiar hobbits), and such a tragedy. How that must have weighed on him.

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(Anonymous)
2004-08-06 07:24 pm UTC (link)
Wow! I have never read anything quite like that! You captured Smeagol so well! I would always guess that there would have been some good in him and regret over what he had done, I mean right after it happened! Very well done! Thank you!

Hai Took

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[info]auntiemeesh
2004-08-06 07:43 pm UTC (link)
Wonderful! This captures Smeagol so well, the lust for the Ring, the nastiness within him that allowed the Ring to claim him at first sight, the loss and sorrow of losing someone dear to him, but also the inability to face the terrible thing he had done to his dearest friend. I love the image of him sneaking out to put flowers in Deagol's hands, but also putting rocks over his eyes, as though he's trying to hide from Deagol's judgment.

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[info]teawith
2004-08-07 02:35 am UTC (link)
Ooh, creepy! Particularly the last sentence. The ring claimed him so utterly and so suddenly, I think the madness it induced came across brilliantly well!

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[info]lindelea1
2004-08-08 06:46 pm UTC (link)
How sad! And chilling... Poor Smeagol. He was just a hobbit, after all, and the Ring claimed him unawares. It was certainly a good thing for Bilbo that pity stayed his hand.

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[info]beethovens7th
2004-08-11 07:05 am UTC (link)
Take a bow!
This was wonderful! When i first saw the discription I thought, hmm, eww, a story about gollum. I almost didn't read it. I'm ashamed!! and Thrilled that I did read it. FANTASTICALLY creepy!!!! I completely agree with all of the above comments made by others!!!! On thing i really like to see in these stories is Description! Tokien was very descriptive!! and so is this story. Very visual. I could SEE everything.

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[info]budgielover
2004-08-16 06:43 pm UTC (link)
Wow.

What beautiful use of language and imagery. I read the last paragraph several times, just marveling over the craftsmanship. Not only did you manage to create a totally plausible relationship for Smeagol, but combined in one story all the horror of the influence of the Ring. I repeat ... wow.

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