subdee ([info]sub_divided) wrote,
@ 2005-05-23 01:41:00
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Current mood: lalala
Current music:3 Doors Down - Going Down in Flames. A Sasuke-ish song.
Entry tags:fanfic:oneshot, fanfic:request, series:naruto

Kakashi/Sasuke for [info]darkeyedwolf
Today's plan: shop to replace the massive amounts of food C, C, M, Y, and K ate yesterday. If you add the people who left early and me, we spell MY SMACCK! Color me easily amused.

Kakashi/Sasuke for [info]darkeyedwolf. I resisted my first impulse, which was to write explicit OOC PWP.

Title: Orders.
Series: Naruto
Genre: Definitely Not Smut. (Although sharingan sex would be super hot. Hypnosis is the ultimate borderline-consensual plot device.)
Notes: Takes place after the Wave Country arc and before the chuunin exam, somehow. (Behold! A magically elongated timeline! And for my next trick, I will attempt to write in-character KakaSasu, aided by the amazing power of retrospective insight.)


It wasn’t until the strawberries that he began to become suspicious.

“Sasuke, would you mind picking those? For breakfast tommorrow.” Kakashi-sensei pointed to a small patch by the side of the road. His visible eye crinkled.

Sasuke ignored Naruto -- the idiot naturally understood the request as chance to expound on the inadequacy of Konoha’s standard field rations, at least until Sakura hit him and told him to stop whining. Instead he turned away and, just out of Kakashi-sensei's view, grimaced. Moving to crouch by the roadside, he swung his pack off his shoulders, dropped it in front of him where he could rummage through it for a cloth wrapper, and thought: “I was going to pick these anyway.”

This had been happening a lot lately. First it had been cleaning the shiruken, then stowing the mission scroll at the bottom of his bag, then checking the forest around their camp last night for traps, then avoiding poisonous berries, then a thousand other things. Things he would have done, was going to do, without having to be told. Frankly he was getting sick of it.

The greatest ninja virtue is endurance, Sasuke thought grimly, and tried not to let his un-ninjalike expression show when Kakashi-sensei casually ordered him to refill the canteens while he was at it.

+++++++++++++++++

“Sasuke, would you mind boiling some water? We want to be careful with the water in this area, there have been reports of sickness in the villages nearby.”

Sasuke froze in the middle of his fourth step, which to be fair could have been either toward the small campfire in the middle of the clearing or the collapsible waterproof tent he was reluctantly sharing with Naruto (only because it rained a lot in the Wave Country, otherwise he'd sleep outside). Then he looked down at his right fist, which was clenched around the handle of small stainless steel kettle. His knuckles were turning white. He put his foot down, carefully. Nodded once, briskly. Couldn’t help stomping a little as he made his way toward the fire.

Did Kakashi-sensei think he was as bad as Naruto? His teammate had to be told to do everything, but Sasuke had initiative. He had this ninja survival thing down. It wasn’t that he minded the water or the strawberries or any of it, really. But he didn't enjoy being constantly ordered around. He especially didn't like being told to do things he already knew to do. If he didn't know any better he'd swear that Kakashi-sensei was baiting him on purpose, the polite, insufferable, mind-reading bastard.

“Oh, you’re finished already? Would you mind covering the fire? We wouldn’t want to give away our position.”

Sasuke ground his teeth.

++++++++++++++++++

Naruto and Sakura hadn’t noticed what Kakashi-sensei was doing, of course. It was deviously subtle. He didn't think he'd be able to put it into words--at least, not without appearing paranoid or neurotic or (worst of all) foolish. He'd need definite proof first.

Scratch that, rewind. He’d need proof period, not to show his teammates that he wasn’t imagining things but for his own peace of mind. Bonus: if he could figure out exactly what was happening, maybe he could figure out why, and then he could get it to stop, and then he could stop thinking about how annoying Kakashi-sensei was. Sasuke nodded to himself in the dark.

He started to slip noiselessly out of his tent. Then he snorted and moved normally--Naruto was snoring so loudly Sasuke could have sharpened his shriruken an inch from his ear and still remained unheard. He made his way to Kakashi’s tent by memory and whatever faint moonlight managed to filter through the heavy fog. His footsteps, the forest, even Naruto’s snoring, everything was muffled. He hesitated at the entrance to Kakashi's tent--how do you knock on a tent, anyway?--before pushing his way inside unannounced, with a mental shrug.

It was quieter inside the tent, if that was possible. He couldn’t hear Kakashi breathing. Which meant the other ninja was already…

“Is there something you wanted to ask me, Sasuke?”

Sasuke started, jerking backwards reflexively.

“Vchs,” he said, and cleared his throat. “I mean, yes. There is something.”

The silence was probably an indication to continue. Sasuke folded his legs underneath him as far away as space would allow. Unlike his own tent, Kakashi-sensei’s was only meant for one person. He resoultely ignored the rest of that thought.

Cleared his throat again. “This trick you’ve been pulling. I want you to stop.”

He could see the smile in the dark, the way he could see Kakashi smile even with his mask covering his mouth.

“What do you mean, Sasuke?”

“You know what I mean. Did you think I wouldn’t notice?”

“No. You were supposed to notice.” That slight eddy of air probably meant that Kakashi had brought his right hand up to his face, possibly to scratch thoughtfully against his jaw. “I suppose you want to know why I’ve been doing it?”

It was Sasuke’s turn to let the silence speak for him. Unconsciously, he moved closer to the door of the tent--cutting off Kakashi’s escape route, or maybe just preparing his own.

“I wanted to teach you to be more patient,” Kakashi said.

Sasuke examined that statement from all angles, just to be sure. No, it still didn’t make sense. “Shouldn’t you be giving Naruto this lesson?” he asked. “I am patient.”

“No, you aren’t. You are patient when it suits you, patient when things are going well. You have no patience for trivialities or inconveniences, and you will find that life as a ninja includes a good deal of both. It is important that you overcome this weakness, because you become predictable when you are impatient.”

It was one of the longest speeches he'd ever heard Kakashi give, and one of very few that didn’t shield meaning behind an easy politeness. It had to be important. Sasuke fumed.

Predictable? He wasn’t predictable. He was smart and cool and he kept his head and dispassionately observed a situation waiting for openings, which was what you were supposed to do if you were a ninja. He’d seen through Kakashi’s ploy--except that Kakashi had apparently wanted him to see through that. And hadn’t he been predicting exactly what Sasuke was about to do every day for the last week?

No. It had to be Sharingan. Sasuke was not predictable, he wasn’t, and it was equally impossible that Kakashi knew him well enough to know the way his mind worked. No one should know someone else’s mind that well, it was indecent. Sasuke shifted uncomfortably.

He wasn’t predictable. He’d prove it.

Sasuke leaned forward to kiss Kakashi in the dark. He got the placement right, but noted with annoyance that Kakashi even wore his mask to bed. He kept kissing, though, and moved forward approximately two inches to sit in Kakashi’s lap, because he didn’t want to hear whether this was something else his teacher had known about him.

(It wasn’t. But Kakashi didn’t push him away.)

END.

Eh, I'm not big on the student/teacher. But this is for [info]darkeyedwolf, and student/teacher has to be part of what she likes about Kakashi/Sasuke because otherwise she wouldn’t like them. So I played that part up.

Going home now; the library after midnight creeps me out.




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[info]darkeyedwolf
2005-05-23 10:29 am UTC (link)
WHERE IS THE PORN?

But, yes, loved it anyway. It's so cool (and in-character) that Kakashi *knows* he'd have to go through all this shit to make a point with Sasuke -- he couldn't just say, hey, kid, you're not as cool and aloof and patient as you think you are. And then he didn't push Sasuke away! Ooh, baby. Score one for Uchiha.

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[info]sub_divided
2005-05-23 01:09 pm UTC (link)
YOU WANT TOO MUCH. (You know I have it all outlined? Because it was 2:00am and I couldn't sleep and then it was 3:00am and I had two closely-written pages of notes and I still couldn't sleep, and then it was 5:00am and I couldn't stop vomiting. Not that these two things are necessarily related--the second was food poisoning. This was the Friday before last Friday, before I remembered that I can't post stuff like that here, people I know read this journal.)

Glad you liked it (such as it was)! The last line was thrown in because I looked this over and realized there wasn't enough Kakasasu in it. (Ahaha.) And thanks.

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[info]darkeyedwolf
2005-05-26 02:57 am UTC (link)
I don't know whether to be amused or more amused that you feel the need to disclaim "IT'S ALL HER FAULT" very three seconds. THE WORLD WILL NOT END BECAUSE YOU WROTE TEACHER/STUDENT, LOVEMUFFIN. Trust me, there are worst sins. I've written most of them. :))

Anywho, do you mind if I linked to this from [info]copycock?

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[info]sub_divided
2005-05-26 03:10 am UTC (link)
Haha, and here I thought I was being noble by saving all the HER FAULTs for the comments. (It isn't the writing, really. It's the posting in a journal where a dozen people I know have already tracked me down. (to do a [info]memlu, Hi! I'm a closet geek & perv, how are you?! :D))

That said, I don't mind links! It's really great you would.

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I am utterly incapable of making intelligent comments, alas.
[info]falxumbra
2005-05-23 08:28 pm UTC (link)
w00t for bratty, impatient Sasuke and all-knowing Kakashi with strawberries. *dies of glee* (you could always just post the porn under a friends lock filter, not that I'm trying to encourage you to do anything you don't want to do, but still- porn. Also, eek, food poisoning. That sucks.)

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Re: I am utterly incapable of making intelligent comments, alas.
[info]sub_divided
2005-05-24 02:12 am UTC (link)
It totally did suck. I don't think I've thrown up so much since I was four. I was queasy for days. (It used to be I haven't thrown up at all since I was four, but Strep last year took care of that. Suffice to say I am very rarely sick and I don't like it very much. Apparently it makes it easier to write porn, though. Yay?)

I don't think I can post here *even* under friendslock because people I know (who aren't you, of course) are friended, too. But I promise to email you a copy if I ever write it up properly.

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[info]tarigwaemir
2005-05-23 11:35 pm UTC (link)
Wow, this is awesome. I love your off-balance Sasuke; he couldn't be more perfectly in-character. You've somehow convinced me that this is an interesting pairing, with all the delicate beginnings of a power struggle. ^____^

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[info]sub_divided
2005-05-26 03:20 am UTC (link)
Because [info]darkeyedwolf is linking here from [info]copycock where it is all KakaSasu all the time, and I'd hate to look *especially* intolerant. Comment follows:

Thank you. But. NOO! Kakasasu is an evil pairing whose only purpose is to torment Sasuke and [info]darkeyedwolf is evil for requesting it. She asks everyone! I think that before you can like you have to think that Kakashi is interesting and not AN IRREDEAMABLE ASSHOLE. Or you have to think that he's a hot, loveable irredeamable asshole. Plus, student/teasher! etc etc.

In summary, I think I needed a few SHE MADE ME DO IT disclaimers on this one.

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[info]keraha
2005-05-25 04:12 am UTC (link)
XD Aother lost to the evil that is [info]darkeyedwolf's kakasasu. And I commend you for trying to make it vaguely canonical. It is terribly, terribly easy to write explicit OOC PWP. (Because when you write PWP, who needs characterization? *g*) And despite having written obscene amounts of the porn, I really am not sold on the concept. Canon Sasuke strikes me as too self-absorbed. :/ Awesome job on not giving in to the mindless easy stuff.

On the other hand-- Although sharingan sex would be super hot. Hypnosis is the ultimate borderline-consensual plot device. Yes! Mindbending non-sex! *visits the Bad Place* 8D

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[info]sub_divided
2005-05-25 08:16 pm UTC (link)
You noticed? Just as I was thinking how hard it would be to not make it porn, I saw saw yours, and I thought, "I really am doomed." Except somehow I wasn't. Thanks! (Although I wouldn't call porn easy, exactly, and especially not good porn.)

Hypnosis isn't a kink, it is the kink. No one under hyponosis does anything they totally don't want to. Therefore all hypnosis sex is by definition consensual and, conscience appeased, we are free to revel in our own perversity. XD

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[info]keraha
2005-05-26 02:28 am UTC (link)
I had so many attempts at decent kakasasu I just gave up and went for porn. *g* I think my problem is the whole teacher/student thing. It just doesn't work for me, especially when compared to my mental versions of the characters. On the other hand, if I scale up their ages, I can squint and sort of see it. (What? OOC you say? Perish the thought!)

... And have I told you recently how much I love you? Not only do you bring up an old kink, you give me perfect justification. "It's consensual, really!" :D

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[info]empyrealrain
2005-05-27 12:34 am UTC (link)
I really liked that (= Kakashi knowing exactly how to push Sasuke's buttons, and Sasuke falling into his trap but refusing to admit it. Very nice, and very good with keeping them in character

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[info]sub_divided
2005-05-27 06:15 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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(Anonymous)
2005-05-31 02:12 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the insight,a PWP would have been boom too.

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[info]sub_divided
2005-05-31 09:29 pm UTC (link)
Thank *you* for commenting!

I like reading PWPs, but I've never written one before. Ummmm we'll see how it goes.

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[info]dirtyoldlady
2005-06-01 03:05 am UTC (link)
Nice work! :) I really think you nailed the characterization, especially with Kakashi trying to lead Sasuke to discover his flaw of impatience for himself. :)

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[info]sub_divided
2005-06-01 01:23 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! Characterization was the number one thing I was going for, even above good writing. I'm glad you think I got Kakashi right, because he's *hard*.

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[info]dirtyoldlady
2005-06-02 09:58 am UTC (link)
He really is! He walks such a fine line between coolness and goofiness so much of the time, it's hard to capture in writing. :)

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[info]yaoi_obsessed4
2006-12-26 12:41 pm UTC (link)
O . O noooooO~ you havta continue this >.< pleaaaaaase!!!!!!! XD XD XD XD

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