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@ 2005-09-05 17:44:00
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[Fic] Counterfeits, G, Atoji
I actually won first place at [info]pot_challenge, how excited am I?

Title: Counterfeits
Rating: G
Genre: Fluff
Pairing: Atoji
Summary: 'You're not going to school? But you love school!'








As Atobe turned the handle, an unusual weight forced the door inward and Jirou toppled over at his feet.

While it wasn’t particularly unusual for people to be falling at his feet, it was usually restrained to the metaphorical happenstance as opposed to the actual.

‘Ah, Atobe-san, what are you doing here?’ Jirou yawned.

Jirou was exasperating at the best of times, at the worst of times… well he didn’t have an adjective ready for that. ‘What do you mean, what am I doing here? This is my house.’

‘Of course it’s your house, Atobe-sama, whose house did you suppose it was?’ Jirou rubbed the sleep from his eyes. ‘I meant that it’s seven-fifteen. You’re going to be late for practice.’

While Atobe was reluctant to admit defeat in any situation, he’d come to, over the years, gracefully avoid addressing the strange logic of Akutagawa Jirou.

‘Yes, I will be late for practice, but you,’ he grumbled helping Jirou to his feet, ‘needn’t be.’

Jirou looked at him blankly, his jaw slack. ‘You’re going to be late?’

‘Yes, very late,’ Atobe replied.

‘Very late?’ Jirou parroted.

Atobe sighed, feeling somewhat exasperated. ‘I’m not going to school today, so yes, I will be very late.’

Jirou’s bag met the floor in a loud thump. ‘You’re not going to school? But you love school!’

It occurred to Atobe that this was possibly the most surprised he’d seen Jirou since his game with Fuji Syusuke at regionals. Then it occurred to him that his mental meanderings had allowed Jirou enough time to recover, remove his shoes and pad down the hallway towards the lounge.

Rule one of managing Jirou, never allow him enough time to think for himself. He should know, he made up the rules.

‘Jirou, you’re going to be late for school,’ he followed the other boy down the hall, rubbing his head.

‘Are you sick, Atobe?’

‘No.’

‘Did you not finish an assignment? Because I have my notes here you could—’

‘I finished all my assignments, I’ve even had them couriered to the school. Nothings wrong, Jirou.’ He sat down on the couch beside the other boy, and rested his head. ‘I’m just tired. You should go…’

Jirou shook his head, blonde hair flying. ‘I’ll stay here with you.’

‘What?’

‘You’re sick.’

‘No, I said I wasn’t…’

You’re sick, and I’ll stay here with you. I can’t go to school without you… so, I’m sick too.’

He was a little surprised, and more than a little confused. ‘Why can’t you go to school without me?’

Jirou shrugged. ‘I wake up in strange places… Shishido draws on me and Mukahi sticks post-it notes to my head… but don’t yell at them.’

Atobe frowned, which he generally didn’t like to do. There would definitely be yelling.

‘You’re going to yell,’ Jirou muttered.

‘Just a little.’

‘So,’ he asked, resting his head in Atobe’s lap. ‘Now that we are sick, why aren’t you going to school?’

Atobe drew his hand across Jirou’s head, fingers trailing playfully through the blonde curls. ‘Didn’t feel like it,’ he replied.

Jirou nose wrinkled, his eyebrows drawing together in thought. ‘Because it’s your birthday?’

Sometimes Atobe would forget. The disarming grin, the constant sleepiness, he would often forget how clever Jirou was.

‘No… because I’m sick.’

Jirou settled farther into his lap with a sigh, ‘me too, Atobe.’



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[info]forochel
2005-09-05 10:44 am UTC (link)
First things first, I squealed in delight when I saw this post on my friends' page, because, well ATOJI! ♥♥♥

And then I squee-ed throughout this ficc because IT IS SO CUTE and the characterisation is WONDERFUL and oh, Jirou, you wonderful little bunnyrabbit who surprises all of us, and Atobe-sama.

While it wasn’t particularly unusual for people to be falling at his feet, it was usually restrained to the metaphorical happenstance as opposed to the actual.

I absolutely LOVED that line. It's just so...so...ATOBE!


Do you have any more ficcus? xD

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:50 am UTC (link)
^__^ Thanks! It's nice when someone really enjoys something you've written. I sure do have more pronce of tennis fiction, you can hit the 'pot_fiction' tage to see everything I've written for prince of tennis. All my tags are also in my user info.

That was my favorite line too.

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[info]angelamori
2005-09-05 11:49 am UTC (link)
*SQUEE*

Oh, the fluff, glorious fluff... *huggles the AtoJi, yes, I've personified it*

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:44 pm UTC (link)
This pairing inspires fluff

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[info]aoireeza
2005-09-05 12:11 pm UTC (link)

*dreamy sigh*

wonderfully made. i'm smiling right now, thanks to your fic. loved how you portrayed atobe. he was so... him... yet so un-him as well. gret fic altogether. keep it up. and congratulations. ^^

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:45 pm UTC (link)
I think Atobe is an interesting character, I always think that he probalby doesn't love his high profile as much as he pretends to.

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[info]sharona1x2
2005-09-05 01:21 pm UTC (link)
‘You’re going to yell,’ Jirou muttered.

‘Just a little.’


Loved that. I loved the whole fic, but that part was just too cute. ^_^

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:46 pm UTC (link)
Poor Jirou, tortured when left with the less reliable, more mischevious team members.

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[info]eala
2005-09-05 01:37 pm UTC (link)
OMG. AtoJi + fluff = Lots of fun and snuggles all around!

AtoJi is my favorite pairing. And this made having to work on Labor Day (grr. argh) worth it. *g*

Sankyuu!

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:47 pm UTC (link)
*o* Thanks, hope you get off work soon.

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[info]sublimeparadigm
2005-09-05 01:53 pm UTC (link)
Oh wow. That was REALLY adorable. It has that kind of cuteness that's more funny rather than sappy. Also, excellent characterization; very eloquent. ^__^

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:48 pm UTC (link)
I don't like to get too sappy, and I think that kind of sentiment would make a 15 year old boy uncomfortable. ^_^ Thanks!

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[info]kuroi_rubyheart
2005-09-05 05:14 pm UTC (link)
Hee hee soo cute. I love Jirou here. ^-^

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[info]tayles
2005-09-05 06:04 pm UTC (link)
And you totally deserved first place XD *favourited it when voting, can now add author's name to it*

The world needs more AtoJi. Therefore you just made the world a brighter place. And Atobe's in character and wonderful and I think I love you...

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:50 pm UTC (link)
YAY! You voted for me, that's so sweet!

I have big plans for Atobe... I wrote a long torishishi, next in line is a long gakushi and then I'll get to Atobe. At the speed I write check back in 2007...

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[info]tayles
2005-09-05 10:59 pm UTC (link)
2007? Pah. I will poke you with the ficpoking stick for more Atobe. You wrote him so nice in this ficlet, I need more!

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[info]alissa
2005-09-05 07:13 pm UTC (link)
That was so adorably cute. I loved it! ^__^

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:50 pm UTC (link)
&hearts Thanks!

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[info]hyatt_ayanami
2005-09-05 07:46 pm UTC (link)
AW *O* This is so sweet♥
Jiroh is a cutie♥
=^___^=
*loveyou*

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-05 10:51 pm UTC (link)
I love it when you give me kitty emoticons! Must write Jirou/Gakuto...

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[info]finferwen
2005-09-06 12:13 am UTC (link)
*unrestrained squeeing* My dear, you are fantastic. When you write Atobe, I like him. Your Jirou is beyond adorable, and I love the way you have them interact.

Congrats on your win; it's very well deserved! ^_^
*throws confetti for good measure*

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(Anonymous)
2005-09-06 02:41 am UTC (link)
Yay, confetti! Did you know that's illegal these days?

I think Atobe has a lot of depth, it's just hidden pretty well.

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-06 02:42 am UTC (link)
I should really log in before replying!

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[info]myst_fujiwara
2005-09-06 03:47 am UTC (link)
YOU INCREDIBLE PERSON YOU -- *speechless*

Ohmygoodness I love this fic. And I was browsing through gakushi.net, and I was browsing through your memories and stuff...

YOU INCREDIBLE PERSON YOU -- *speechless*

Write more! *bounces excitedly*

(Lovely atoji crack early in the morning gets me hi~~ghhh!)

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-06 04:07 am UTC (link)
I'm not sure my rate of writing could keep up with your rate of reading, but I'm sure I'll give it a try.

Still working on my website so it's not finished yet!

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[info]sparda219
2005-09-06 03:49 am UTC (link)
lol

"I wake up in strange places, Shishido draws on me and Mukahi sticks post-it notes on my head!"

Awwwwwwwwwwwwww... Jiji is so cyuuuuute! This was an extremely sweet story. Thanks you!

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-06 04:09 am UTC (link)
I once saw a girl at universtiy who feel asleep during a lecture, she woke up to discover her arms decorated in coloured holepunch re-enforcers. That's what I pictured Gakuto doing to poor Jirou :(

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so, so sweet...
[info]jade_kitty
2005-09-07 01:20 am UTC (link)
ADorable honey. loves the Rule one of managing Jirou, never allow him enough time to think for himself. He should know, he made up the rules.
totally my favorite live. plus the head in lap/head stroking. you paint such pretty pictures in my head.


you construct such in depth relationships in such a small amount of words.

ahhh, talent.

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Re: so, so sweet...
(Anonymous)
2005-09-07 02:13 am UTC (link)
Thanks kitten =^_^= It's all about the short story.

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[info]darkeyedwolf
2005-09-07 03:51 am UTC (link)
*LOVES* Like everyone else has said, it's just cute and adorable and it made me go "awww" in so many places. *memories*

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-07 08:35 am UTC (link)
Thanks ^___^

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[info]dystopiarcadia
2005-09-07 08:53 am UTC (link)
Oh wow! Once again, I marvel at the intricacy and subtlety woven in your fics, and the way you portray the interaction between Atobe and Jirou reminds me of the way a painting springs to life, all little brushstrokes revealing and coalescing and going beyond the surface of a portrait... Ok I'll stop ranting now :p So, I guess it all comes down to a big thank you! *hugs*

(Oh hey by the way I finished my first Niou/Yagyuu fic! And working on the next one, which shall be multi-part I think)

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-07 10:37 am UTC (link)
You're too nice &hearts I'm not sure it was all that, but I'm thrilled you really liked it.

I always try to work a lot under the surface so the reader can see more than what might be there.

It's fun for me, because I always have a complete backstory and sometimes readers read the things I was trying to write in and sometimes they read something completely different, but just as good.

I hope that a lot of people were wondering why Atobe might want to avoid his birthday.

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[info]dystopiarcadia
2005-09-07 10:56 am UTC (link)
I think it was a really good idea to broach this subject the way you did, because not only does it give Atobe more depth, it also raises many questions as to how much of his outward personality is just a front, and how he really perceives the image people have made him out to be... That's what's so inspiring about your fics too: they make me want to write my own take on this character, and challenge my personal view of him. Praised be thee! :D

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-09 11:38 am UTC (link)
I hope you do write your own take on this character. I'm glad others want to write after reading my stories, because there were writers who did that for me too.

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[info]crossing_by
2005-09-09 06:15 am UTC (link)
wueeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee ....
waaaay tooo cure ...
so sweet ...

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-09-09 11:39 am UTC (link)
Thanks &hearts

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lille_bean
2005-10-18 08:24 pm UTC (link)
^__^ hehe. jirou is so adorably perceptive. i love your atobe- i cannot reiterate that enough. simply love him. and your jirou is again- adorable.

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[info]orpheneritus
2005-10-19 07:35 am UTC (link)
Hi again XD

I really enjoyed writing this story, it was one of those writing days where it came nice and easy and it felt good, instead of those nasty horrid, painful days where I'm forced to stay up late and struggle with every word.

I really cherish the good days, they are few and far between.

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[info]moonythestrals
2006-12-01 03:47 am UTC (link)
DHAKJHDSKJHSOCUTE.

*huggles you*

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[info]bloodyfire
2007-02-02 12:43 am UTC (link)
zomg this one was trey awsome and kawai ^_^ i like how you do this pairing as well it's so awsome ^_^ do u go by manga visual or anime.. cuz int he anime joroh has like brownish hair...

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[info]pat_ace87
2007-09-30 04:35 pm UTC (link)
kearjhgblidfgvndf;lkgero;igmjdflkv O_Ofdnsfgdfnb;dfbnmcvx.,kjndvkf THIS WAS TOO CUTE, YOU KILLED ME >_

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