AN EPIC DISASTER ([info]epicdisaster) wrote,
@ 2005-05-30 13:46:00
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[one-shot] Fullmetal Alchemist ~ Tact

Tact
Roy/Ed. Gen. PG. 427 words.
warnings: spoilers for end of series.
author's notes: There's a lot of subtext in Roy and Ed's interaction in ep. 48. Thus, I wrote this. Criticism is very much appreciated.


Roy extended his hand, thin lips twisted in an imitation of apology; a brave face, one most definitely not his. That sharp-looking idiotic fedora (all the rage in a city more fashionable than Central) hung heavy over his face, transient protection against the golden sun and prying eyes, but offered little relief from a combination of the two; these particular gold eyes brazenly glared such resolve that Roy had changed his orbit to make revolutions around them. Those immutable eyes had been a catalyst for his final selflessness; revolution was never without sacrifice.

It had been more than a political or military gamble; Roy had been taught by a boy half his age about compromise. everything I need to know I learned in kindergarten, Roy almost snidely murmured, but he held his traitorous serpent tongue, distracted by the flash of emotion across Edward's face.

The blond stared at the proffered hand in transfixed pain; he didn't want this gift, a casually tossed box of equality, more ribbons and tissue than anything, because Roy was feeling sentimental

pompous bastard, thinking you can *give* something like that

--never mind that was what he had wanted, fatherly pride in a simple gesture, a word-- because that would mean Roy was finished; they would fail and die, their years of work and blind hope and pain like smoke in a military hurricane. Ed was losing focus. Keep moving, the mantra hissed inside him, but he drifted, frozen and at sea.

Roy's hand was bleached, aged, a dead man's hand

black looks so much better on me-- what an aging peacock --

Ed's eyes softened for a millisecond; the man was, like it or not, the only hero Ed had, in a sea of monsters. He entertained the thought of reporting damages to the colonel after all this, watching the man blow a gasket and make some comment about his height, all jabs now made amicable by the completion of their quests. And then maybe they'd go on a walk and Roy would be a hell of a lot nicer than that Hohenheim asshole.

But colonels had feelings too. Ed's eyes hardened with mock carelessness into amber, fossils of youth, and knocked aside the offered hand with a half smile, a promise. He willed the proud lump in his throat down into the base of his stomach. He felt childishly lonely, the orange light of a dying day glaring in his face.

Roy felt a smile on his lips. You little punk, he almost said, but "Farewell," came out first.



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[info]honooko
2005-05-30 09:01 pm UTC (link)
;o;! This makes me so sad. I cried more at this moment in the anime than I did at Hughes' death, because that little gesture says so much more. Very, very nice.

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-30 09:12 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! It's just such a great moment. It would be difficult to capture in live action, and I think that that one moment is the essence of their relationship.

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[info]sky_dark
2005-05-30 09:37 pm UTC (link)
that was beautiful, such a wealth of emotion in such small gesutres that you so poetically spelled out for us. =)

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-30 09:57 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! Such a nicely worded response xD

I don't know about other actors, but this is actually what I do a lot when I'm in a show-- it helps me see objectively, from the author's and the audience's perspective-- then it's my job to show that subtext onstage in those little movements, the way someone carries a glass or moves across the room. As I've said before, this is, dramatically, a very interesting beat. I felt like it needed some explication, although I'm not sure I did it justice.

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[info]sky_dark
2005-05-30 10:58 pm UTC (link)
The blond stared at the proffered hand in transfixed pain; he didn't want this gift, a casually tossed box of equality, more ribbons and tissue than anything, because Roy was feeling sentimental

pompous bastard, thinking you can *give* something like that

This passage said the most to me. Ed still wants his hero. I think you did it more justice than most would have. =)

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 05:43 am UTC (link)
*unintelligible noise of joy* Thank you! I liked that bit too. Ed's a curious character to get into.

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[info]asidian
2005-05-30 11:43 pm UTC (link)
Ooh. Really nicely written. Catches the feeling of that scene very well- and I appreciate that you add to it without spending time on things that are already there in the anime. You sort of like... touch on what's there and then build from it. *thinks that over* Does that even make sense? ^^

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 05:45 am UTC (link)
I think you're right-- the movements themselves mattered very little; it was what they were communicating that was important. Thank you! ^^

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[info]cephiedvariable
2005-05-31 12:12 am UTC (link)
Ugh, I can't even explain the massive fangirl reaction this little piece caused to bubble up inside of me. It's very in character, very canon. It's as if you took everything that was broiling beneath the surface in that scene and just WROTE it, as if this could be an exert from a novelization of the series. I very nearly wanted to CRY because it just... gah. I would quote parts of it that were especially good, but it was just all so. sdkfjhroihewpw;oejm

I just ran out of coherency.

*THUMBS UP TO A ZILLION!!!*

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 05:58 am UTC (link)
I'm so glad you think it was canon! I tend to twist characters through my own lens, rather than write them true, as they are in the original film/series/whathaveyou. I've read a lot of your work, and I'm honored that a writed of your caliber likes this.

PS. I just read your LJ info-- you get major points for having Defying Gravity and Rent quotes. <3

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[info]devils_devotion
2005-05-31 12:36 am UTC (link)
Ah, the entire ficlet was very thoughtful and touching, but the last three paragraphs were definitely my favorite. Because first of all, you gave a logical and coherent explanation for just what the HELL that little hand gesture WAS, of all things. @.@ It was nice, and teh Demidevi liked it.

You know what? She just liked this thing as a whole. She liked it thiiiiiiiiis much, and indeed is going to rec it on her LJ. ♥

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[info]sky_dark
2005-05-31 01:58 am UTC (link)
I should rec it too, I always forget to do that =/

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 06:06 am UTC (link)
Eee! ;o; Thank you!

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 06:01 am UTC (link)
And you know that your unspoken trust icon partially spurred this. I like the last bit too. You're too good to me, Devi-san. ^^;

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[info]devils_devotion
2005-06-01 02:03 pm UTC (link)
Oopsie? ^^;; [info]gundamnook made the hand-slappy icon. Good! Great minds think alike! Nonsense. You need love squished on you like woah.

*squishes*

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-06-01 05:52 pm UTC (link)
*squishes back* Yaaaaaaaaaaay.

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[info]crazy_toffee
2005-05-31 01:46 am UTC (link)
You little punk, he almost said, but "Farewell," came out first

AH... I now have my angst dosage for the night fulfilled. ^_^ Beautiful little contemplative piece. Made my chest feel a bit tight. T_T

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 06:04 am UTC (link)
*offers candy as placation* Thank you for reading! I'm glad you reacted to it so. ^^

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[info]crazy_toffee
2005-05-31 01:21 pm UTC (link)
Glad? Glad? I see.... so this was intentional torture! *takes candy and chews*

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 03:32 pm UTC (link)
It's my plot to get people upset before bedtime, ruining their sleep, thus messing up the biological clocks of America, making everyone chronically late to work, which will collapse the economy! YESSSSSSSSSSSs.

Hi, I just woke up.

What I meant to say was, I was glad I got a reaction out of you in particular, because I am a great admirer of your writing.

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[info]crazy_toffee
2005-05-31 04:19 pm UTC (link)
But I live in SOUTH AMERICA! *sticks out tongue* NYAAAAAh.. oh dang, wait. We might still be on the same timeline...T_T NOOOO!!! LACK OF SLEEEEEEP!

Well, I definitively liked it sowritemore!

Ah... warm squishy flattered feeling...^.^

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 10:07 pm UTC (link)
SWEET! I can bring down South America too! >:D Mwahaha.

more is on the way, I'm going to be computerless for a few days here, but I'll still be writing and editing stuff I've already written.

Ditto. ^^

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[info]scico
2005-05-31 02:14 am UTC (link)
*cries*

the song I'm listening to right now is not helping... emotion...

I really like this. *tearful smile*

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 06:13 am UTC (link)
*offers box of tissue* I'm glad/sorry xD

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[info]scico
2005-05-31 05:33 pm UTC (link)
aww, hee hee. just write more! ^_^

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 10:12 pm UTC (link)
*salutes* Yessum!

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[info]scico
2005-06-01 04:32 am UTC (link)
yay! woot! ^_^

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[info]lh_icons
2005-05-31 02:25 am UTC (link)
Nice scene interpretation! I liked! *two-thumbs up!*

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 06:14 am UTC (link)
Thank you! ^^

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[info]lh_icons
2005-05-31 02:04 pm UTC (link)
Now I wish I could find the episode on my HD again so I can watch it. ^^;

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[info]forgottenlover
2005-05-31 04:52 am UTC (link)
::saves:: an never have enough proper reference to these things

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 06:15 am UTC (link)
I'm honored. Thank you! ^^

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[info]forgottenlover
2005-05-31 06:23 am UTC (link)
::blinks:: not a problem!

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[info]subtle_dusk
2005-05-31 06:57 am UTC (link)
You little punk, he almost said, but "Farewell," came out first.

Perfect.

Am memorying.

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 03:28 pm UTC (link)
Woah, awesome! Thank you! ^^; Nice icon, by the by.

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[info]subtle_dusk
2005-06-01 01:18 am UTC (link)
I <3 your icon as well :D

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[info]ithronluin
2005-05-31 10:30 am UTC (link)
*speechless*

what in the nine nyas.....? You read my mind literally! Holy crap. The last line. I actually thought of it when Roy was conversing with Edward.

Wonderful fic...gosh. I have no words to express my admiration of this fic. o_o

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 03:29 pm UTC (link)
If I read your mind, I must have been at least a little accurate, and that's what I was aiming for. Thank you very much! :D

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[info]miokohagata
2005-05-31 02:55 pm UTC (link)
Amazing... This really shows what the communication and meaning that gesture had. Adding to mems.

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 03:35 pm UTC (link)
*squees* Thank you!

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[info]prettyarbitrary
2005-05-31 04:57 pm UTC (link)
Nice. You got some stuff in there I hadn't thought of before.

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 10:11 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! ^^

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[info]mikkeneko
2005-05-31 08:33 pm UTC (link)
good stuff. very good stuff.

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-05-31 10:15 pm UTC (link)
Eee! Thank you, Sloth-sama. ^^;

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[info]tenkenxotaku
2005-06-02 01:04 am UTC (link)
"Sayonora"....

TT.TT I LOVE THAT SCENE.

You did a great job writing this <3

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[info]epicdisaster
2005-06-03 03:50 pm UTC (link)
;o; Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

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[info]materia_indigo
2005-06-03 08:09 pm UTC (link)
That fic made me all weepy and I haven't even SEEN episode 48 yet! I really really want to see the rest of the show now!

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