nothing rhymes with nipple clamps! ([info]airgiodslv) wrote,
@ 2004-06-28 22:19:00
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Avaritia
Title: Avaritia
Pairing: EW/OB/DM
Rating: R
Content/Warnings: Rough sex.
Disclaimer: This is a complete work of fiction, no disrespect intended.
Notes: For the [info]furorscribendi ‘Avarice’ challenge. Thanks to Brenna for her incredible insights, and to Lalejandra for picking it apart with honest and thoughtful criticism. I am honoured and grateful.





Elijah knows about Dom. He begins to suspect when he catches Orlando nuzzling Dom’s neck, slightly more than friendly, hugging him from behind while Dom closed his eyes and smiled secretively. He knows for certain the night he shoves Orlando onto the bed and yanks his shirt off, sees the rosebud bruise on his chest, right next to his shoulder, that Elijah doesn’t remember putting there. And he remembers giving bruises. Every single one.

He’s not sure if Dom knows about him, though, because Dom can be fairly oblivious, and seems to be quite happy with what he’s got. What he’s got, however, belonged to Elijah first, and Elijah wants to make sure that message gets across loud and clear.

He bruises Orlando that night, deliberately; a dark, blood-broken mark on Orlando’s thigh, where Dom is certain not to miss it. Orlando moans and thrashes, and Elijah smiles before he lifts his head and swallows Orlando’s cock.

Dom doesn’t say anything the next day, but after their second break in filming he comes back looking tousled and used, and his eyes dart over to Elijah and hold a fraction of a second too long before dropping away as he blushes. And Elijah knows that they all know, now. Except maybe Orlando, who doesn’t say anything about Dom that isn’t strictly friend-related, and pretends that his unexplained scratches and bruises come from a life of dangerous activities and adrenaline-seeking.

Elijah privately thinks that Orlando’s activities are more dangerous than he thinks, but he doesn’t say anything. Orlando isn’t the one Elijah is playing against.

There’s a love-bite over Orlando’s heart a few days later, and Elijah is full of lust and fury. He bends Orlando over a table and fucks him mercilessly until Orlando’s begging becomes too much and Elijah’s exhaustion wins over, and he lets them both come. It doesn’t make him feel much better, but at least some of the frustration is out of his system.

There are bruises on Orlando’s hips the next morning, and Elijah allows himself a feral grin and sucks hard on them while he works his fingers inside Orlando in the shower, reveling in the sense of ownership when Orlando comes crying out his name.

The feeling only lasts until the following night, when Orlando submits to him, willing and eager, and Elijah finds another set of bruises overlapping the first, finger-shaped and lighter, but still clear, and scratch-welts down either side of Orlando’s spine. The vision of Orlando fucking Dom is startlingly vivid, and he sees red for a brief moment before ruthlessly smothering the anger and working Orlando over so thoroughly that they’re both soaked in sweat by the end.

Dom likes to be bent the way Elijah likes to bend, and that knowledge shifts their little competition into something new. Something more. Elijah bites Orlando at the junction of neck and shoulder, hard enough to break the skin, and Orlando screams when he comes. Elijah smiles and licks his lips, and the victory tastes like Orlando’s blood.

Elijah smiles at Dom when he shows up the next morning, and he sees the questions in Dom’s eyes, the chafe-marks on Dom’s wrists that are nearly hidden beneath the sleeves of his shirt. Dom doesn’t understand yet, either. Dom doesn’t know that Elijah has bruised every part of Orlando that there is to mark, and that now he wants more. Orlando isn’t the challenge. Orlando is easy, willing to be used, needing to be taken. There’s no satisfaction in it.

He leaves messages for Dom on Orlando’s skin, coloring every bruise and mark left by Dom’s body with his own, darkening the love-bites and raising the welts, while Orlando watches him apprehensively, afraid of being caught out without knowing that it’s already far too late. Elijah bites and pinches to keep him in line, and Orlando screams in pleasure as Elijah claims every inch of his skin, every drop of his sweat. Elijah’s sure Dom will eventually get the message.

Although it may take him a while to realize that the game has changed.




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[info]lalejandra
2004-06-28 08:24 pm UTC (link)
This: What he’s got, however, belonged to Elijah first
and this: Dom likes to be bent the way Elijah likes to bend
and this: Elijah’s sure Dom will eventually get the message.

And, of course, this: Although it may take him a while to realize that the game has changed.


SO. FUCKING. GOOD.

This story gives me shivers. :)

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-06-28 08:40 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much for everything, darling. You are an amazing editor, and you make me think about my writing in general, not only this story in particular. I appreciate your honesty and frankness, more than I can say. And you somehow manage to make me squee with delight over what I've achieved at the same time that you're causing me to think about improving. If you're not careful, I will claim you as my own and never let you go. Really, I can't say it enough...

Thank you. <3

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[info]overloved
2004-06-28 08:34 pm UTC (link)
I would love love love to see what happens btwn Elijah and Dom when Dom figures it out.

This is lovely. Dark-ish and so fucking sexy.

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:15 am UTC (link)
I think I'll get there. These guys have caught my attention now, and I'm curious to see what happens as well. Thank you for your comments!

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[info]impasto
2004-06-28 08:34 pm UTC (link)
*draws little hearts around you*

And you know, something that escaped my attention earlier: There’s a love-bite over Orlando’s heart a few days later, and Elijah is full of lust and fury is wonderfully chilling, because there's nothing at here about love and such...Orlando's behaviour and Elijah's response is just so contrary. Fabulous.

Am tigging for you as I type. Whee, headache's abated so I can play!


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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:18 am UTC (link)
Whee! Yes, exactly! They're playing as if they care, but love isn't what it's all about. Elijah really doesn't want or care about Orlando's affection, he only cares about winning.

They're so dark they scare me a little, sometimes. But I'm intrigued.

Thank you for everything!!

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[info]llaras
2004-06-28 09:56 pm UTC (link)
*tingles*

especially for this line:
He leaves messages for Dom on Orlando’s skin, coloring every bruise and mark left by Dom’s body with his own, darkening the love-bites and raising the welts

Very nice.

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:22 am UTC (link)
Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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[info]bunniewabbit
2004-06-28 10:52 pm UTC (link)
OMG THIS IS FABULOUS. Sorry for shouting, but this is just what I needed right about now. Just fabulous! <3

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:23 am UTC (link)
Thank you so much, darling. You are a treasure.

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[info]lovewithapathy
2004-06-28 11:29 pm UTC (link)
I'm not sure if I've ever feedbacked your stuff properly, but this is just divine. I love how Orlando goes from being the prize to just a message board to a higher target. And the idea that Dom is the greater challenge is great, since he seems that way and it's nice to see him be portrayed as the "item" to strive for.

Sorry, it's late. Hope that made sense. Suffice to say, love the fic.

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:27 am UTC (link)
Oh, thank you so much! It does indeed make sense, and I'm glad that you followed my intent enough to analyze the relationships. It makes me all warm and fuzzy. *g* Thanks again for responding!

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[info]the_larch
2004-06-29 12:42 am UTC (link)
Oh yes. That was an absolute delight. Wow.

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:29 am UTC (link)
Thank you, I'm thrilled that you enjoyed it!

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[info]zoniduck
2004-06-29 01:19 am UTC (link)
Ooooooh! ::shivers::

This stands in sharp contrast to the sweet little ficlets by [info]kiltsandlollies and [info]glasgow_blue that also showed up on my Flist tonight, which somehow makes it even more tasty. Piquant even. I *so* love variety in my LotRiPS!

Elijah’s sure Dom will eventually get the message.

There are a great many things I would be willing to do for the pleasure of reading *that* fic.

::waggles eyebrows atchoo suggestively::

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:31 am UTC (link)
*laughs*

Well, I'm glad that I was able to oblige! I'm afraid that sweet isn't often a term I can apply to my stories, and definitely not to this one.

And oh, really?? I might take you up on that. *g*

*licks*

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[info]acari
2004-06-29 06:24 am UTC (link)
Oh! *hearts*

There is so much going on beneath the written words. The idea that Dom unwittingly(?) upped the ante with letting Orlando fuck him and leaving reminders on Orlando's body is just too good.

I can't quite decide what to make of it, though, of Dom in general. You leave us a bit in the dark about him. I like that you give hints but not elaborate. He is the one I'm terribly curious about.
This is a perfect fic for remixing.

I'm not sure if I want a sequel, or just leave it like it is and I can fill in the blanks myself. I'm curious and at the same time satisfied with what I got. Make sense?

This part here: The vision of Orlando fucking Dom is startlingly vivid, and he sees red for a brief moment before ruthlessly smothering the anger and working Orlando over so thoroughly that they’re both soaked in sweat by the end.
The moment when things shift, the game changes. So very good.

And this: Elijah smiles and licks his lips, and the victory tastes like Orlando’s blood.
is just so very vivid.

I'm babbling. Just, I liked this very much.

elijah, please do naughty things to my pup. thank you. tigs you omg!

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:35 am UTC (link)
Darling, dearest...thank you. Your feedback always makes me squirm in delight, and this is just priceless. Dom is a shadow, yes, but that's because he simply hasn't entered the picture. He wasn't important as a multi-dimensional character, just as an objectification, what Elijah wanted. I would love to see someone remix this! Of course, I am a slut for remixes in general, so there you go. *g*

I may have been talked into continuing this as a full seven-part arc. *hides* So you should get to meet Dom within a month, if you really want to. *kisses*

Thank you so much!

*gleefully sends Elijah to do naughty things*

You don't even have to ask him.

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[info]peanutter
2004-06-30 01:34 am UTC (link)
Your writing leaves me speechless and utterly jealous that I could never produce fics this good. This was absolutely wonderful and achingly vivid.

This line especially stood out to me: Dom likes to be bent the way Elijah likes to bend, and that knowledge shifts their little competition into something new.

Just fabulous.

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:42 am UTC (link)
Oh, no! They are never intended to do that! But I thank you very much for the compliment, and I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

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[info]byandby
2004-07-08 05:57 pm UTC (link)
Wow. Possession. Competition. Marking. Pure and utter testosterone. What an incredible image - so perfectly clear.

I love it. Gah.

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:44 am UTC (link)
Thank you!! I love your descriptives. <3

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[info]sophrosyne31
2004-07-16 08:39 am UTC (link)
your writing bruises me in the best way.

catching up on flist, and the first thing i strike (because yours is the first journal i peek into) is just... bloody gorgeous. lush and dark and plum-coloured. i bite into it with relish.

*juice flowing down my chin*

you're a witch, alright. *extreme love*

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[info]airgiodslv
2004-08-01 09:45 am UTC (link)
Oh, darlingest...I am honoured, and delighted, and all squirmy inside. Thank you so much for your words and your images, and just for you in general. I am much with the love. <3

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[info]sophrosyne31
2004-08-03 06:28 am UTC (link)
i am much, much with the love for you, mon fleur. yup.

*wildly*

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