super chief. ([info]skoosiepants) wrote in [info]finniganfans,
@ 2005-04-15 17:45:00
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Entry tags:seamus

You Fade
Title: You Fade
Rating: PG
Word Count: 206 (not counting quoted poem)
Characters: Seamus.
Challenge: April 2005
Summary: Seamus doesn't like the way the story ends.
Notes: I did it! This was inspired by [info]veracity's response Home. Doesn't exactly fit the bill of the challenge, but... close enough. I'm not very good with angst, as you can see :) Totally un-beta'd. Sorry.

You Fade

Dark hills at evening in the west,
Where sunset hovers like a sound
Of golden horns that sang to rest
Old bones of warriors under ground,
Far now from all the bannered ways
Where flash the legions of the sun,
You fade - as if the last of days
Were fading, and all wars were done.
~ The Dark Hills
by E.A.R


You don’t like the way the story ends.

You don’t like the way it ends, so you rewrite the middle, sitting on a warm, flat stone, watching the sun burn yellow-red across the horizon.

There never was a Second War.

You never stood side by side with Neville on a grim-gray dawn, dark wands fisted in your hands, eyes tight and dry and unblinking.

You never lost three years of your life.

You never threw up blood, never huddled, pale and shaky, in the shadows of a ruined castle, never killed a man with a jagged sliver of glass.

You never thought you’d rather die than fight, because there wasn’t anything left to fight for.

Ginny never grinned at you, wide and macabre and empty, in the autumn light. You never had to bury her - or Dean, or Terry, or Millicent, or - in the dense, rock-packed earth. And you never had to clutch Ron’s hand with white fingers when he refused to cry. You never cried.

None of that is in the story you write.

In the story, there is nothing but Ireland and warm air and solid breaths, and shades of green bright for miles ‘til they hit the blue break of sky.




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[info]veracity
2005-04-15 11:02 pm UTC (link)
Oh! So heartbreakening sad! *sniffs* But wonderful. That was so. The death, you could feel it, and the aching of lonliness of surviving something so devasting. I think you're wrong, you can write angst. You wrote that really well.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-16 02:18 am UTC (link)
thank you :) I actually wrote this in the vet office waiting for Happy... I carry a steno pad with me everywhere now *shakes head* I'm glad this didn't come through too overdone *nods*

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[info]veracity
2005-04-16 02:44 am UTC (link)
*grins* You are such a geeky writer (but of the many reasons I love you) and it's just so well written. And I usually never read the "you" fics. It wasn't overdone at all. Very good actually.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-18 01:49 am UTC (link)
I know. I'm such a big geek with my pen and paper *grins* But it turned out good! *dances*

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[info]veracity
2005-04-18 02:01 am UTC (link)
I need to start carrying a pad and pen. Actually, first I need a larger purse. I've been looking for an uncompartmentalize hobo bag for awhile now. They're perfect for what I need.

And it turned out VERY good. *grins*

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-18 02:19 pm UTC (link)
hobo bag. *giggles* My purse is very tiny... I just have the pen stuck through the top of the steno pad and carry it around like that :)

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[info]veracity
2005-04-18 02:34 pm UTC (link)
*laugh* I always try and carry big ones so I can keep a book in it. Never know when you'll need it. I need to keep the tab in my purse, just for those on the rides to somewhere that an idea comes to me.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-19 05:09 pm UTC (link)
I love when ideas come out of no where...

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[info]veracity
2005-04-19 05:53 pm UTC (link)
That's how I got the idea for my Percy fic that I'm working on.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-19 06:47 pm UTC (link)
Ooooo Percy fic! *bounces*

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[info]veracity
2005-04-19 06:50 pm UTC (link)
*laugh* Yes, I'm working on it now.

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[info]likecandy_sweet
2005-04-15 11:56 pm UTC (link)
One of the few times I will disagree with you. This is so...*sighs*

Warning: One of my few serious moments ahead.

This is a haunting snapshot of how painful and traumatizing loss can be. You just want to crawl up under the covers and pretend it didn't happen. I can only imagine how it would feel to kill, to bury so many friends. But I imagine it would be like this.

Beautiful.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-16 02:20 am UTC (link)
thanks, m'dear *hugs* I rarely step outside of crackfic, but this bunny wouldn't leave me alone.

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[info]absolut_jmo
2005-04-16 12:34 am UTC (link)
I think it is brilliant. Being the angst h0r I am I have read and written it often. This is just....stunning.

*hugs* Good job. Now to fight of the melancholy you have brought forth I think we need to dance. ;)

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-16 02:24 am UTC (link)
Thank you *hugs* I successfully wrote angst! Sorry for the saddness, but I'm glad it came through okay and not... too much :)

we should definitely dance. It would probably cheer Seamus up *nods*

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[info]hirondelle
2005-04-16 07:44 am UTC (link)
Wow. That's beautiful. I don't know what else to say...because it just is. Best angst fic I've read in quite a while.

Gah. You have no excuses not to write angst. :P

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-18 01:51 am UTC (link)
thank you so much! *hugs you*

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[info]suckerforlove__
2005-04-16 02:56 pm UTC (link)
that was gorgeous, it didn't feel like angst at all, it felt like he was starting from the beggining and things were going to be alright in the end.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-18 01:52 am UTC (link)
*hugs* thank you!

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[info]eska_rina
2005-04-16 06:59 pm UTC (link)
Oh my, that was really beautiful...

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-18 01:52 am UTC (link)
thanks, m'dear *bounces*

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[info]insipid_paragon
2005-04-17 09:48 pm UTC (link)
I think you write lovely angst. This piece makes my heart ache. Especially the part about (not) having to bury Ginny or Dean, or Terry, or Millicent, or - I think it's the breaking off at that point that did me in, that hint at so much more loss that he's just not willing to acknowledge at this juncture.

there is nothing but Ireland and warm air and solid breaths, and shades of green bright for miles ‘til they hit the blue break of sky.
Gah. How could you think you don't write brilliant angst? Look at that and tell me your heart doesn't just clench? Beautiful job, my dear. Just beautiful.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-18 01:53 am UTC (link)
oh, thank you! I'm so glad it came off as something lovely and not too heavy *hugs you*

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[info]sushinase
2005-04-18 04:14 pm UTC (link)
this was so touching.. beautiful, really

I'm not very good with angst, as you can see :) total bull.

I likes.

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[info]skoosiepants
2005-04-19 05:10 pm UTC (link)
Thank you *giant hug*

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[info]seratonation
2006-01-02 11:55 am UTC (link)
I love you. I have mentiond that? I came here searching for something and stumbeld across it, recognising it as the thing posted on the front page of your LJ, I was hoping for more, it was just so heart-wrenchingly good and sad and you could almost taste the bitterness. i could rambel on and on, but that would include re posting the whole thing so... just *loves*

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[info]skoosiepants
2006-01-02 06:15 pm UTC (link)
thank you, hon! Glad you liked this. I like exploring Seamus' serious side every once and a while :)

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