Kitty ([info]kittyrainbow) wrote in [info]af100,
@ 2006-01-16 01:43:00
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Challenge 16 entry
Title: Failings
Prompt: #16 - Lapse
Rating: G
Characters: Mulch (!)
Points to: The Unofficial Jade Princess Fan Club
Words: 100

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Mulch used to hate theft, to hate hearing the other boys talk about their loot. He preferred being with his father, who said he was good at mining, he'd go far, he was special.

Then Mother died. Father closed up. Mulch let him drink, and joined the boys at the shopping centre. They praised his nimble fingers.

Later Father began smiling again. Mulch left the boys.

But one night, Father hit the bottle and then hit Mulch. After escaping, Mulch stomped down to the centre, returning with somebody's watch.

Mulch doesn't remember this. He believes he's a thief at heart.

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I can't believe I wrote Mulch!fic. And sympathetic Mulch fic, at that...

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[info]thewhitelily
2006-01-17 02:27 pm UTC (link)
I can't believe I liked a Mulch!fic. And a sympathetic Mulch!fic at that. And I really can't believe it gave me a plot bunny! Darn you, Kitty.

Anyway, I love it. Especially "hit the bottle and then hit Mulch." And the last line. Well done. *is now all gooey and sympathetic for Mulch*

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[info]kittyrainbow
2006-01-17 03:15 pm UTC (link)
OMG, plot bunny! It's terrifying. Where has likeable!Mulch sprung from?? I still want to read this fic you've thought of though.

Thankies. :D Yes, I think those were my favourite two lines. They both just kind of arrived fully formed like a mini-plot bunny with very sharp teeth.

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[info]thewhitelily
2006-01-18 01:55 pm UTC (link)
You'll get to see the bunny when I'm finished my entries for the "lapse" challenge. There's eight. Don't ask. Fortunately, only one's about Mulch. Darn you for getting me hooked on drabbles and Jolliet, too. *glares at the large litter of newborn drabble!bunnies*

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[info]blueyeti
2006-01-18 01:38 pm UTC (link)
Oh, you made me *read* a Mulch fic. I don't know if I've actually *done* that before.

I liked the line about beliving himself a thief at heart, best, but the hit the bottle then hit him was also very nice. Two good lines in a single drabble, that's more than I ever get.

Points: the first two sentences could have been broken up better with semi-colons or fullstops, because... they looked like longer sentences which were shoved together. And, well, any sob story sounds cliched if it's not given enough time to develop. Or perhaps I just view any sob-story as cliche, regardless of the particulars or the situation.

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